Very good! Some small complaints: First, some of the lines were fluffed. Most of them were fine, and would have been right at home in a real DBZ episode, but I'm thinking of little things, like when Vegeta is asked if he is referring to himself as a true warrior and he answers with a simple "Yes." Some lines just need better emotionality as well, but that's just something that sometimes can't be helped.
My other complaint has to do with the action scenes. I know how much time these sorts of animations can take, but a lot of action scenes were very anticlimactic. What specifically comes to mind are when Vegeta first powers up, and when the villain is punched through a wall. There's very little to convey action besides the movements of the characters. A good example of conveying action through things like camera movement and lighting is Oney's "Chris & Harry," dated and retarded as it is.
Very nice though. Just some room for improvement.
Thanks for the review. If you saw the first cut of this video you'd notice the action was much slower, I went back and tighten up the video. For example if you look at the fight scene at the 4:00 mark I tried to get that nonstop intensity your talking about, that sequence was originally not in it. If I do another project like this I'll try to keep things moving more like that the whole video. I also feel the ending works well. I really wanted the end fight to be big and have a snowballing effect. Each attack leading to the next. I differ from a lot of people in this, but I like wide shot action. What I mean is if you take say a Bruch Lee movie from the 70s, where the camera is steady and pulled back where you can see clearly whats happening vs say the Bourne films where the camera shakes like crazy and has a 20x zoom on.
I am sorely tempted to rate this a 1, since, you know, it made poop look pretty dang good.
Normally I write semi-intelligent reviews
Not this time.
That was a fun cartoon, and I thought the commentary was a good idea. Maybe not well done, and extremely uninformative, but the concept was... nice. Er, yeah. *Ahem*
I have to say, I loved the main body of the story, but the end seemed like it was just a bunch of random junk thrown in to make it longer. It didn't really add to the animation at all, it was just dead weight. Plus, I'm extremely annoyed that you didn't elaborate on the fact that Jerry was in heaven.
I mean, really. What the hell? I thought he was IN hell.
Cool all in all though, the script just needed a bit of reworking.
By the way, I was surprised to see that Jerry talked. I thought that was another no-no, besides good endings and nice people. Way to break free of your restraints.
Funny! Sort of. Sad too. Not the greatest style though.
Are you living in Israel? I know that you have to serve for like two years there... Good luck!
Hold on a second...
So P-Bot is a female? Great movie!
Heh, great fun.
Nice job. Animation was good, liked the jokes! The music could have been better and some parts of the animation were a bit rough, but a great flash in the end!
Also, I have to say this to those voting low for religious reasons: come on now. Seriously. I may be a Jew (Menachem is my hebrew name), and therefore, not offended by this, but still. Judaism joked about a LOT more than Christianity does, but who really cares? It's all for fun! To that person who said that the author would go to hell... don't you think God would just probably have a sense of humor?
thanks man !
An amazing end to an amazing series
I loved everything about this series--the animation, the style, and the story itself. There is really nothing more to it!
Cool, funny movie! Great story line and plot, I liked the characters too. "A fag eh..." hilarious. Could you build on the turtle? (the story, not a house)
Sound effects would be a good idea
It was very short, and the into took too long. The animation was good overall. The music was good, but it should have been background. Sound effects would have really improved the flash, like a sort of electric sound while the man spliced his genes. It wasn't the best, but it was okay.
Im not too convinced myself... purposely synced the animation with the sound to give it a better feel. By maing it background music the scene changes wouldnt have been as effective.
Perhaps throwing in the odd sound effect now and again would have been a better option. And very short? Its 58 seconds long and it takes a surprizing amount of time to animate something that long on 24 FPS... My animations wont be much longer than that in the future...
Thanks for the review tho.
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